Headstrong Heroine: Into the Veil

**I received a free copy in exchange for an honest review**

3.5/5—it hurts to rate this novel under 4 stars, but there are glaring grammar and spelling errors.

This is one of those stories that I really, really, really like. Part of me wishes I could let slip the other L-word. There’s a spunky heroine, tons of adventure, a dash of romance, a mystery, and magic. Unfortunately, the story outpaced the author.

While INTO THE VEIL is well-imagined and the characters are nicely developed, it’s impossible to ignore that an editor could have bumped this novel up to a 4. There were mistakes all throughout that distracted and confused me. That alone is annoying in the midst of a gripping scene…but the writing itself was patchwork. Not bad, just not cohesive. For instance, the writing is much less sophisticated in the first several chapters than in later chapters. I would go so far as to say it would appeal more to MG than YA, though later scenes amp up enough to warrant a YA label.

That being said, this novel wouldn’t rank a 5 for me, even with the help of an editor. I enjoyed how unique the world was, and I enjoyed seeing it through Lyric’s eyes, but there are several plot holes that hindered me from enjoying the story as much as I might have. Little quirks, like how the twins were “in hiding” but couldn’t even be bothered to hide their white-blond hair with a little dye, or their ice-pale skin with a touch of bronzer, bothered me. I mean, pink streaks? I get wanting to be rebellious, but at what cost? And that was just one example.

But with grammar and plot holes aside, there’s a lot to admire in INTO THE VEIL. The concept of veilwalkers being sages—a subgenre of witch that is almost extinct—is unique and intriguing. As is the budding romance between Lyric and Aiden. I do love moody men. *sigh* I wish I had a better grasp of what he looked like, to be honest, but his fierce loyalty combined with his sensitive moments are enough to make me swoon.

 And don’t get me started on the world! The mystery! The danger! It’s all so exciting, and it makes turning each page an adventure all its own. I can’t wait to find out more about Lyric’s mother and the scandalous affair that may or may not have resulted in murder. It’s like a magical soap opera, except without the bad lighting.

In all seriousness, I didn’t expect to be as attached as I am. I’m truly invested in Lyric, especially since by the end of the novel she feels so alone. I can’t lie: I just want to hug her. And possibly beat Aiden overtop the head with his own bad attitude. But if they kissed and made up, I’d totally be fine with that, too.

My hope is that in the following novels, Lyric comes into her own power. Maybe not magical power, but into some confidence and intrigue that will give her more footing in her dangerous world. When Gemma told her to grow up, it seemed harsh…but it was the truth. I’m excitedly looking forward to see if that happens.

Would I recommend INTO THE VEIL (except to my grammar-nazi friends)? Yes, because I think fans of paranormal fantasy will enjoy the unique world and spunky main character—but also because this is an outstanding example of indie writing. I only hope to find more authors like Jennifer R. McDonald!